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To Be a Robot

They call me The Robot
I've learned to stop caring
My feelings distraught
No longer worth sharing

My life has been cruel,
Brutal and coldhearted
Throwing my emotions in a whirlpool
A fate that can't be darted

What hurts me the most
Won't leave me alone
Like a parasitic host
That can't be thrown

Suicide is a thought
But out of the question
A fate not to be sought
And a pointless action

Instead I have found
A safer painkiller
As my problems amound
To some it's a chiller

I no longer feel
I no longer care
Who needs to heal?
When you're no longer aware?

I no longer cry
I no longer laugh
I may seem dry
As sun-dried chaff

They call me The Robot
The one without feelings
I no longer give thoughts
To tugs at my heartstrings

I've learned to shut out
What hurts me the most
Those who like to shout
Are yelling at a ghost

And should I care?
That my insides are scattered?
When I'm no longer there
Nothing's left to gather
Had a rather interesting thought train on the way to school today. Everywhere its Robots turning humaniod, but in reality, can this effect reverse? can someone whose hurting so much turn robotic? shut out the things that hurt them the most to survive?

what causes people to feel fear to something, what causes them to laugh at another? why do they feel guilt and cry? is this something we can control? can we just...shut it out?

ya I have weird thought trains ^^;

I'm not very good when it comes to ryhming poems, so if anybody has any suggestions to make this better, do tell ^^
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JadeScarlett0018 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012
it makes me think. i like it:) keep going my friend your very good
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Wakerra Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It was certainly an interesting thought train that day...
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Fengsune Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2011
Keep it up practice makes perfect or so some say.
I happen to agree as perfection is a process of bettering one's self.
Also to answer you question it is possible to control any part of ourselves.
Though such would take much practice, faith, discipline, and will power.
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Wakerra Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
indeed it does. this was just a little thing I wrote to get a thought off my mind. I kinda like how it turned out, but I dunno if I wanna really focus on fixing it all that much. I still like it though, I put a lot of feeling into it.

and yes, it does take a lot to focus one's emotions/reactions etc against the normality, for better or for worse
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Fengsune Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2011
What is normal? ^^
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Wakerra Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
the normal human thought process and way of thinking :shrug:
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Fengsune Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2011
Ah, the 4-6% of brain users. The new norm will soon be balanced 8% of the whole body.
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fiction-freak Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2011
This flows very well for a rhyming poem, I've never been able to create a non-cheesy rhyming poem but you've done a fantastic job!
This really is a brilliant idea, as we all become more and more technologically advanced perhaps we may cross paths with robots? Them evolving into something more human and us filling the void left by their departure.....
What a brilliant idea!
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Wakerra Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
actually, my idea was on a person who hurts so much inside, they turn their emotions off to deal with the pain. its a bitter blessing. You no longer feel pain and suffering, but you also don't know joy. is it really worth it?
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fiction-freak Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2011
It depends on how much joy you get out of life I suppose...
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Wakerra Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
everything is in balance. As much joy you get, so is as much of your pains.
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fiction-freak Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2011
Very true.
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EquidnaRojo Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You, my friend, make me want to draw my "Brain-Eating robot" pic ever so much more...
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Wakerra Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
has never heard of your "brain eating robot" pic....is curious....
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EquidnaRojo Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
XD; Just a little bit of a rant about old friends who treat others like they have no feelings at all... I made a comment about people online being nothing more than a bunch of brain-eating robots... XD; I've been wanting to do a pic, but it's hard to com up with the inspiration XD;
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bluecatqueen Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2010   Traditional Artist
I guess I'm curious about why you wanted it to rhyme. I like the poem, but it doesn't need to rhyme unless you have a particular reason. I know how it feels to shut off emotions though...I did that for years.
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Wakerra Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I usually do free stlyed poems, I never was very good with rhyming, I think I wanted this one to rhyme cause I wanted a flowing feel to it.
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bluecatqueen Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2010   Traditional Artist
Ok, that makes sense. There are probably other ways to achieve a flowing feeling, but I can tell you put a lot of time into getting the rhymes to work.
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Wakerra Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I had a TON of tabs up for rhyming words, dictionary, and thesaurus to get the right feel to this piece XD
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Gattlin Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2009
Very emotional, and I know that several of us have felt this way. It's also an overall great poem.
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Wakerra Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
I will admit a few areas of this poem are a reflection of myself, but not all of them.
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SunstarPhoenix Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2009
Wow, that was impressive.

I'm sorry it took me so long to get to my messages to check this out.

Your author notes put me in mind of the whole 'Vulcans don't have feelings' thing. (I've been in my Star Trek phase at the moment. I'm a not so secret closet Trekkie...)

I wonder sometimes as well if there is a way to just shut off feeling something. Especially when that something hurts. It's not a sharp ache that recedes into time, but a kind of dull ache that is there always. Never ceasing, yet never really being pushed to the back for very long either.

I based a character on this in her 3rd developmental phase as stuck in this kind of loop. She hasn't gotten to a part where she can actually live and feel without trying to hurt herself yet.

-Kai
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Wakerra Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
vulcans lol. whats sad is the only reason I know about them, is cause of the Star Trek movie we watched in my Intro to Animation class ^^; although I must say the inspiration for this poem had nothing to do with vulcans XD

the more I think about it, Ignorance is both a bliss and a curse at once. what must it be like to live through life, not having to worry about feelings? overall not knowing, just doing what you need you. never having to worry about the "feelings coaster" ride. :shrug: lots of things went through my head before I wrote this. glad you like it though :D
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SunstarPhoenix Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2009
I wonder if we could truly grow or learn anything without feeling.

Even vulcans can feel (they just repress it really REALLY well). They have such intense emotions; if they didn't control them, then the emotions would control them. They aren't able to 'take a step back and cool off' when they're all charged up. They worked really hard to get it so it would be hard to charge them up as a safety mechanism. ...sorry, Star Trek kick at the moment,

-Kai
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Wakerra Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
I believe you can't learn anything without feelings. you need feelings to fail, and from failure you suceed. you need to be crushed in order to grow and be a better person, etc.

lol, I can tell you really like star trek....again, I only know about it really cause of the movie we watched a week ago ^^;
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SunstarPhoenix Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2009
I've been watching Star Trek my whole life. There was a time when I was really annoyed with The Original Series for Star Trek (that's the first one with Kirk and Spock), but I'm coming to enjoy it as well. I still don't like Enterprise.

I agree with the feelings thing. I think that might be why sayajins (I know I misspelled that) become stronger after they nearly die or are defeated.

-Kai
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Wakerra Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
:confused: whatever a sayajin is, but I believe you ^^; no need for elaborations
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SunstarPhoenix Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2009
They're from Dragon Ball Z.

-Kai
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Wakerra Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
ya I never was much for that show....I think I saw some scene with a little kid who goes super monkey, then turns back to normal in a FULL FRONT NUDE SHOT -.-'
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NaraGanmi Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2009   Photographer
-is jealous of your poetry skills-

We had to write poetry for english, and mine epically failed TT.TT
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Wakerra Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
:shrug: I never really considered myself a poet or writer, yet whenever I share my stuff, people tend to like it. and i never was much for rhyming either, but I wanted this piece to flow, so I tried ^^;
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NaraGanmi Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2009   Photographer
Yeah, mine was so bad it actually got a D. But thats becaus ethe final got lost so I had to turn in my roughie ^.^'
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Wakerra Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
ah, ya that could do it...
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NaraGanmi Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2009   Photographer
Yeah... The final probably wouldve only gotten a C or somethin. I swear he's the devil.
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Wakerra Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
lol XD
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NaraGanmi Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2009   Photographer
Beware, beware the chrome dome!!! O.o
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Wakerra Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
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Marsuwai Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2009
I know these feelings well. I went that way for quite a time, and it nearly ruined me by itself, yet at the same time it also kept things from ruining me. In the end you also need inner strenght to deal with things, but shutting yourself off to violations from the outside can buy you this time, depending on what you base your inner strength on.
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Wakerra Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
It is true. turning Robotic is both a bliss and a curse within itself...
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SuperSmashBrosGuy Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2009
Haha, told you I'd comment eventually... You say you aren't good at rhyming poety? That's because 99% of GOOD poetry, DOESN'T rhyme! Haha, I would post some of mine for you to read, but it doesn't exactly go with the the SSBB theme... lol
But seriously, you okay? No matter how much you deny it, being through this myself, this is a definite cry for help...
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Wakerra Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconmewfacepalmplz: why do you keep insisting that my depression art is a cry for help? I've found that being depressed is actually a surprising source of inspiration, and drawing depression themes is more fun than happy ones.

I LIKE SAD THEMES OK?!? I dunno why, but I just like the sad stuff.
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SuperSmashBrosGuy Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2009
Whilst I agree, as much of my stuff is also dark... I also know that you have been through a lot! As a freind, I am concerned... because I see patterns, and I know you have and are going through some hard stuff. I can just see relations between your work and your life, I would know because I was the SAME way and experinced it myself. Note me if you want to talk about it, just know that it is okay to talk about if you really need to. I'm concerned, because it seems that depression is for the most part all you know, and it is obvious that you relate to it. :icondragonglomp:
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Wakerra Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
depression isn't "all I know", see, back in the days of scary darkness when everything was drawn in profile and looked very Egyptian as far as anatomy and structure goes, things weren't depression related. but oh, on the contrary: it was all Peace, Happiness, and Flowers! and a bit of comedy (or atleast attempted) this era lasted so long before I realized how pointless and dull it was, so I decided to scrap all that and add some action to my art and storylines. although I may have pushed the "action" a little on the far side, but its still better than what it used to be...shudders...

Perhaps my depression themed stuff is getting stronger as my own depression is leaking out into my art, but its a means of escape and vent, and it feels good. and like I said before, I like sad themed things ^^
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traitorousValkyrie Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2009  Student Writer
A brilliant piece. The rhymes were well done and made the piece more interesting. I don't think there are exactly words I could use to describe what I felt while reading it. It was almost like I could see into the mind of 'The Robot' at this moment. Well done.
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Wakerra Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
^^

Ignorance can be a bliss and a curse at the same time
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LoneWolfLover Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2009
It's a very true concept and I think we all have a time in our life when we are very much as you said. I can atest to that. :nod:

But you wrote this beautifully; it flowed very easily without interruption...
EXCEEEEEEPT...
THIS ONE LINE:
"Throwing my emotions in a whirlpool"
It's smart line, but I think it has too many syllables and it kills the flow! Could you perhaps think of something better to squeeze in there? D:

But I genuinely did like this. But I'm a sucker for pretty words. ^^
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Wakerra Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes, I would have to agree the whirlpool line is kinda...long...but "whirlpool" was the only other good rhyming word option I had for "cruel". I'll have to figure some way to shrink that one down...

lol your a sucker for pretty words, and I'm a sucker for sad things XD
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